1. Clear, pleasant speaking voice 2. The section about her role in the White House was exceptionally good. 3. You gave many interesting facts about Mrs. Clinton
Weaknesses
1. The term “nowadays” is slang and shouldn’t be used in a formal presentation. 2. You shouldn’t say “This is the script.” Just start the presentation. 3. You mispronounced “Illinois” and one time when you said Clinton, you forgot to pronounce the “T”. 4. You didn’t give a full marriage date, just the year. 5. Your presentation could have been better organized. You went back to several topics, which could have been covered in the same sentence or two. An example is the fact that you stated Hilary was a girl scout when she was young. After stating that, you could state that her interest in the girl scouts continued even throughout her husband’s presidency. The same for her interest in a health care bill. Overall grade B+ 27/30
Kamryn,
ReplyDeleteStrengths
1. Clear, pleasant speaking voice
2. The section about her role in the White House was exceptionally good.
3. You gave many interesting facts about Mrs. Clinton
Weaknesses
1. The term “nowadays” is slang and shouldn’t be used in a formal presentation.
2. You shouldn’t say “This is the script.” Just start the presentation.
3. You mispronounced “Illinois” and one time when you said Clinton, you forgot to pronounce the “T”.
4. You didn’t give a full marriage date, just the year.
5. Your presentation could have been better organized. You went back to several topics, which could have been covered in the same sentence or two. An example is the fact that you stated Hilary was a girl scout when she was young. After stating that, you could state that her interest in the girl scouts continued even throughout her husband’s presidency. The same for her interest in a health care bill.
Overall grade B+ 27/30